People wants to get jewelries to inform their authority. However, only rich people have it be  cause it is very rare so precious few people can

have it. There are many jewelries, gold and silver, emerald, ruby, and more and more jewelries. People can make jewelry artificially, but some

jewelries can’t be made by people. They are diamond, gold, and many other expensive stones.

 Do you know diamonds? It is one of the most expensive stone on the Earth. A small diamond ring is about million won. Some people think that is

only waste but many people use it to celebrate other people. Diamond is a rare stone which is produced in Brazil, South Africa and Austrailia.

At fist, diamond is like the shape that your think. Jewelries need to be smelted. And it can be shape.

Many people know emerald. Emerald is one of jewelries. Emeralds is very expensive, too. It is produced in Colombia, Zimbabwe, Madascar, Sri

Lanka. There are many kinds of emeralds. They are beryl, morganite, heliodor, and aquamarine.

Many people think jewelry is only luxury. However, jewelry is one of the earth and we have to learn about them. So we have to try to know about

them.

 

Hello, Eric. Your essay is very interesting. However, please remember to avoid starting your sentence with conjunction (and, so, but). Doing these will cause incomplete or hanging sentences. Please work more on using articles, prepositions, and especially pronouns. Always consider the subject-verb agreement when writing sentences. Lastly, remember that “jewelry” is a non-countable noun, so there is no plural form for it. “Jewels” refer to gemstones found in the earth while “jewelry” refers to accessories adorned with gemstones. Overall , you did a great job! Keep practicing.